poem 4/13/10 – Poem Starting with a Line from Norman Dubie

Today’s readwritepoem challenge – write a poem beginning with one of the listed opening lines from a Norman Dubie poem.  I have not seen his work other than the lines listed.   I chose this not so hallucinatory one.

My poem is actually 9 lines, working a bit off the Whitman/Ginsberg “breath line” – the dangling endings are necessary for the wordpress page layout – I suppose it may look different depending on your screen aspect and resolution.  And if this is your first time reading one of my poems, the dips into old fashioned flowery effusion is intentional.

Poem Starting with a Line from Norman Dubie

His chapel fell into flowers long ago
The tomes and chalice spirited away sullied under robes and ramie sacks
The windows’ brittled remnant stories huff in light a language now a nonsense
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++tongue
The incense once blessing expectant faces quivering blinking lowered unto him
Has bloomed up into the slipping clouds long ago now raining gentling o’er
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++distant kingdoms
Fragrancing foreign lands beholden unto foreign gods blessing supplicants pious
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++as were his own
So here now the crocuses lilies queen anne’s lace and ivies gently irrevocably
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++root apart
The fallen stones the arid mortar ground back to ashes ground back to dust
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++under the
Sun abiding

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4 responses to “poem 4/13/10 – Poem Starting with a Line from Norman Dubie

  1. the format complements the period piece description and photo 2.. takes you to a specific place… poem…

  2. I like your take on the form of this poem! Nice work, and you have a lot of great imagery as well.

  3. I love your “dips into old fashioned flowery effusion”! I am all for that. 🙂 This was is a lovely, graceful poem.

  4. Quite an elegant poem with a musical rhythmic flow …well done.

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