5/23/10 – a 6.8.6 haiku

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the young buck watches me
through the fence not three feet away
like I am trapped, he free
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3 responses to “5/23/10 – a 6.8.6 haiku

  1. At night I can hear the coyotes taunting the neighborhood dogs…saying the same the same thing about freedom…enjoyed you haiku.

  2. I like the way you’ve turned the normality round in this haiku.

    http://thelaughinghousewife.wordpress.com

  3. I like this, Larry. You hit the nail on the head. If I were going to change anything, I’d have to leave out the word “like,” but atlas, it could screw up the syllable count… : )

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